Maisie, this is a focussed essay, which relates almost everything to representation. It is analytical. Well done.I like the way you set out your overall view in your introduction. - Try to push your analysis. Your point about the close up of the boy is good, but too brief. How does it show his maturity? What does the CLOSE UP show that other shots wouldn't? Remember to really focus on the effect of the CAMERA ANGLE itself. - If you're talking about dialogue, quote it; be as specific as you can. Try to vary the points you make; you talk about diagetic sound a lot. The same goes for lighting; what is the lighting like? - Why is your lighting point randomly in the middle of editing? - Your Mise-en-scene section is weak. EAA -14/20 EGs- 14/20 T- 7/10
Maisie, this is a focussed essay, which relates almost everything to representation. It is analytical. Well done.I like the way you set out your overall view in your introduction.
ReplyDelete- Try to push your analysis. Your point about the close up of the boy is good, but too brief. How does it show his maturity? What does the CLOSE UP show that other shots wouldn't? Remember to really focus on the effect of the CAMERA ANGLE itself.
- If you're talking about dialogue, quote it; be as specific as you can. Try to vary the points you make; you talk about diagetic sound a lot. The same goes for lighting; what is the lighting like?
- Why is your lighting point randomly in the middle of editing?
- Your Mise-en-scene section is weak.
EAA -14/20
EGs- 14/20
T- 7/10
35/50